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Workshop #306: "Ghosts" by Ed Durbrow

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This track has been submitted for your friendly, constructive criticism. What useful feedback can you give the artist? The floor is yours to talk about the track and how they can fix problems in and improve upon the mix and the song.

Description of the track:

Recorded in 1986, I recently added a bunch of synths and another rhythm guitar track. Piano sound is an Akai S900; Drums were added in 2000. There are now a lot of synths to mix in. Kind of overwhelming. I kept turning things up because they seemed to be getting lost. Finally, I couldn't hear the drums and put them on a separate Aux track so I could turn everything else down!

Funny story: I just noticed a month ago that the singer sang the wrong words in the first line. He sang "at night" instead of "in fright". I found "in" in another part of the song, copied and transposed it, but I could not find an "fr" sound. My friend put in his own 'fr', on the theory that there is no pitch content, and you cannot even hear the difference. Miracles of technology. Pitch correction was also a wonderful tool used to restore this old piece. Done in Digital Performer.

Artist's website: soundcloud.com/ed-durbrow

Lyrics:

Dreaming child wakes in fright Seeing things in the dark night
Mother comes and dries the tears
But she can’t kill the fears
He knows she is wrong There’s something bad out there
But only he can see

Ghosts________ from the forest Come__________ out at night
Ghouls_________ coming for us Souls_________ as cold as ice

Alone in bed wide awake Hide under covers but can’t escape
Here comes mama this time she’s mad
If you don’t sleep boy
you’ll be punished bad
Can’t see what I can see Won’t even listen to me
Why can’t she believe? There’re

Ghosts________ from the forest Come__________ out at night
Ghouls_________ coming for us Souls_________ as cold as ice

It had red eyes and bright green skin
Walked through the wall it came right in
Jumped on my bed and flapped it’s wings
It moaned and groaned I had to scream
Aaahhhhh

Little boy begins to change Ridicule turns fear to rage
No one believes, you’re on your own
When it comes again
show them how you’ve grown
He knows secrets only the wizards know
Now he's not afraid

Ghosts________ from the forest Come______ out at night
Ghouls_________ coming for us Souls_______ cold as
ice cold cold as ice

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