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Description of the track:
I used to write songs like I would have written a diary, when I was 20. Time has passed since, Real Life happened, and I have recently decided to try my hand at music again.
This song is part of a series that talks about a computer-based variant of "Flowers for Algernon", and is early in the story, with the narrator happily setting up his computer. The final version will have some extra FX and dialogs overlapped but I would still love to get your feedback on where I'm heading.
Made with Reaper, M-audio FastTrack Pro, 2 guitars (one acoustic one electric) and my trusty ole cheapo mike, an LEM UD-360. And only freeware VST's.
My system's running fine
And it's all that matters to me
I get scared by what I see
It's a crowded ant farm
And I could get stepped on - easily
All updates applied
And this is the way it should be
I run on my own time
No one here is judging me
An orderly meat space
A rest from the rat race
Just for my box and me
The configuration's fine
And it's even talking to me
I will stay forever living my life on this screen
I faintly remember something about Marie
Years ago but it's gone
Now it's just you and me
Think of just how great this will be
I can kiss the world goodbye
And be the king of my pc
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