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Description of the track:
I always wanted to write a symphony, because it seemed like the ultimate legitimacy as a composer. So, off and on over the years I've tinkered with this piece, which is in traditional fast-slow-fast symphony. It's definitely a more modern take on the style, however.
I've never taken any formal musical training, but I've played guitar for over 16 years and picked up other instruments, real and synthetic, here and there. I love the lush sound of an orchestra, and Dumeh is my attempt to create my own version of it.
As it stands, it's completely sequenced with Logic Studio, using the Native Instruments Session Strings library and several stock Logic virtual instruments (and a live guitar recording near the end).
Artist's website: nebyoolae.com
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