This track has been submitted for your friendly, constructive criticism. What useful feedback can you give the artist? The floor is yours to talk about the track and how they can fix problems in and improve upon the mix and the song.
Description of the track:
At the time I wrote this song, I was suffering from sleep problems that lasted going on for six weeks, where I couldn't get more than three hours of sleep a night. I was also living in a very beautiful part of the US - Michigan's "upper peninsula" right on the shore of Lake Superior - and after yet another sleepless sunrise I put this together.
It was written in the DAW Reaper. All the instruments and sounds are of my own creation, aside from the percussion, which comes from various sample packs.
Artist's website: foxhilledm.com
Have a listen to the track and offer your constructive criticism for this Workshop in the comments section. Feel free to offer any type of advice - arrangement, mix, lyrics, performance. And remember to play nice - be constructive!